Yeah, it's pretty incomplete, and I think things have changed since the May version too.
For example: the May version claims that if the computer needs to hold the drive off from transmitting (so it can handle a pending serial interrupt) during an 8 byte group of data, it changes to state 0 and ignores the rest of the group in progress. Then when it signals to the drive that it's ready again, the drive will continue by repeating the group that was interrupted.
I've been disassembling the HD-20 driver in the Mac Plus ROM and it looks to me like now the behavior is that the drive finishes transmitting the interrupted group, and then when the computer says it's ready, the drive continues where it left off with the next group. My complete guess is the behavior probably changed because this note was considered unacceptable behavior:
I also think that more aspects of the hold-off behavior have changed too. We may be able to figure out the behavior based on the ROM disassembly and what it tells the IWM to do, but it'll take some time to digest.